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Your heart is like the sound of a solo violin
Whether that violin is playing a soft, gentle tune all to itself, or letting out a woeful cry
I can tell only by looking at you, or seeing those soulful eyes
That you are hurting
But even when the song is sad, that violin always sounds so beautiful.

You look at me with love and emotion ineffable
And I hear that violin, even now
One lingering note of this melody brings me to my knees,
Never in my life have I heard music so lovely.

Your one sound is the softest in all the world
Other instruments drown you out in their crescendos, and you are never heard
But here in this silent room, I hear your gentle hymn.

As you look back at me, the violin's sweet cry increases in volume
And quivers with a sweet, quiet joy
So peaceful and loving, it echoes on forever
Lingering on long after its instrument is gone.

So deeply, my heart is pierced
The entire world seems to move through me
This one song makes me part of something greater than myself
And greater than the world
For never again will I feel this close to Heaven.

Let the cry of my own heart's voice swell and rise with yours in song
For you are my Only
I would never feel so worthy of this duet
If you hadn't made me part of you.

I will hear this music forever
And so will I love you, my One
Long after life has come to an end
For always you will play me this eternal hymn
On your one violin.
I know I never post literature, and this doesn't even follow iambic pentameter or rhyme

But I was listening to the October Sky soundtrack (best movie ever)

And I was inspired to write.
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:iconheartofsnow:
HeartofSnow Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
... .________. what CAN'T you do?!?!?!?
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iR0s3 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2009
This is really nice! I love it~!
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SomniumKreasIncito Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2009
That's a really awesome poem. I happen to write poetry the same way you do!

Keep it up!
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Sumomo-chan619 Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
i love it :]
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tokidokimazui Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2008
i love everything in it :)
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Xx-Chrissy-Knoll-xX Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2008  Student General Artist
i have never heard a poem so well-written, being a poet (and violinist) myself. that was amazing!
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Johnfleece Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2008  Student Writer
damn you. Being too good is a crime you know.
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:iconmusical-artist:
musical-artist Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2008
that is absolutely beautiful :love: :heart:
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buriedin1928 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2008
you seriously underestimate your writing abilities if you dont usually write poems...this poem is one of the best i have read...ever!
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Random-Musings Featured By Owner May 5, 2008
We totally just watched October Sky in science class!

I had completely forgotten about that movie beforehand. (My uncle had rented it for us on vacation when I was five)
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PsychoBeaver Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2008
I love the emotion in this piece... It's so melancholic yet enchanting.. I officially worship your poetic skills..
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Floweramon Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2008
*sniffles* Oh wow.... that was beautiful Miss Kylee....
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music-master Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2008
From one poet to another. It was wonderful, the sentimental meaning behind it seems deep and tragic almost. I could see almost all the metaphors you used for the violin. It is a beautiful instrument, isn't it? I actually have one, I can only play country on it though, my mother on the other hand... XD
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flyingfault Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2008
wow, you happened to pick one ofmy favourite instruments! do you or someone you know play?

I love the rhythem of the piece, and I hope you do more!
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AlchemicKeyblader Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2008
*sniffle* <3
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FireJewl1819 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2008
This inspires me to write too o.o

Mind if I show this to my fiance? You've managed to capture exactly how I feel about him ::nod:: Very inspirational
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nasirmajor Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2008
SIMPLY LOVED IT......
SO BEAUTIFUL SO SOUL SOOTHING......
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Affection
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Moso-stuff Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2008  Student General Artist
I play the Cello... *sob*
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ShadowtheHedgey Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2008
Very nice poetry. Yay! For once someone else loves that movie too! :boogie:
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PrinceOfFire Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
*plays violin*

I wish I knew how D:
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Cookiemonster124 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008
Awww we watched that movie in Science class once, and it was my first time watching it.
OFF THE HIZZ-HOOK, DAWG.
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KirstenChocolate Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
I remember October Sky! … Just not the music. :faint:
Lovely poem, too. :)
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sporkable Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008
The violin.
I plays it.
lolol.
-shot down-
Very nice.
Both beautiful writing skills and drawing skills.
A winning combination.
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ginnyw143 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008
Wonderful poem, the symbolism is very beautiful. :)
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catqueen13 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Are you kidding? That was beautiful!
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b-rad08 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008
thats great
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Ichigo-chan1988 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008
mostly the best ones are those wich doesn't rhyme... its just beautiful... very nice one..
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psychedeas Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008
That was so beautiful.
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kisaki-akizuki Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008  Student General Artist
I may not like violins, but the style is something I like. It's like human speech, but not slang or anything like that. I think this piece of yours borders between poetic composition and public speeches.
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iMelodic Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008   Photographer
That is a wonderful poem :+fav:
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julietcaesar Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. That's all I can say. It takes my breath away. Violins are beautiful instruments too, even if I only play the piano.
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naini Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
very magical.great work :)
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TimetravelerJoe Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the front page!

Some honest critique: (that means good stuff too!)
You have very strong imagery, which is a fantastic starting point for a poem. Your metaphors are great as well--I love the word "duet" used, especially. In my opinion, with the musical theme, it might have been nice to have a nice Ballad structure of a poem, or at least some sort of structure--you may want to consider some meter and organization. Also, it seems as if your punctuation is used a little oddly--you don't have to put a period at the end of every stanza, and you could certainly have more if you think the poem should pause for a moment. Read it out loud to yourself, and the pauses should present themselves naturally.

I hope this quick comment was helpful, and I hope you continue to write poetry!
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GentlyEscapes Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008   Writer
Poetry doesn't have to follow any rhyme or reason. Sometimes it is nice, but often times, it's just a way to hold back expression.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008
quite the contrary...

it can be the floodgates releasing all that a soul can offer.
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miccheru Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
:heart: So sweet. I love it. :+fav:
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HeartbeatOfMoments Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
Incredibly beautiful!
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Mi-Chan104 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
That was lovely! :D
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sprinkling-of-color Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
I love it :D
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SumthingIsOutThere Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
Absolutely love it.
You need to write more.
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stephanie-t-bat Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
that's so nice you should make it into a song and sing it. i play the violen it's fun ^^
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tu2 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
wow, that's awesome writing
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LegalDrugFanatic Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
Oh god, this was beautiful. I loved that movie…
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gaara9281 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
This could be made into a song. :happycry:
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Ruikurodai Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
This is one of the most beautiful thing si've read in a long time. i do love it.
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kitsunegirl14 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
the music is acually a little hard to play. the melody takes us to fifth position. fun, beautiful, hard. pretty poem! <3
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Caipirina Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008  Hobbyist Artist
It's always nice to see some literature in the fron page, nice piece I like how you describe ^^
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megarob15 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
nice peotry!
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Amberpaw Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
That was absolutely lovely. :peace:
It was very emotional too which was all the better. c:

~Amberpaw
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Twilight-Fan-77 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2008
Oh I love this very nice and so beautiful
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